This paper was harder for me to write than the other two papers we’ve written in this class. It was hard to write about both sides of the argument. I had to fix some grammatical errors and I had to add a paragraph about zoos to give further evidence to my argument. But hopefully I wasn’t too one sided and still got my point across. I’m not sure if I focused enough on the opposing argument but hopefully it’s enough that the reader reads both sides. This paper was interesting to write because we got to pick our topics, and I wanted to learn and know more about animal cruelty while writing my paper.
You certainly did acknowledge the argument in favor of using animals for entertainment, but you clearly overpowered it with your own position. One thing you didn't address that I'm now wondering about is animals in show biz. I wonder if they are mistreated also?
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